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南京环球雅思学员Wu Yanzhu

 

 

雅思写作8分经验

 

 

 

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您好!


我是环球雅思高分班的学员Wu Yanzhu8我月13号第一次考雅思就得了7分(7.5 6 7 7)很高兴。写这封信,一来是想环球雅思汇报成绩,二来感谢您对我的作文的巨大帮助,没有您的指导,我的作文是不可能得到7分的。我像您知道的那样,几乎通篇都是复杂的句式。虽然作文题目很出人意料,但是我没有受到一点影响,因为我早就有了以不变应万变的框架、高级词汇和谚语。
谢谢环球雅思的老师们!!


礼!

                      Wu Yanzhu

 

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Task 2:

 

Some scientists believe that studying of the behavior of three-year-old children can tell which children would grow up to be criminals. To what extent do you think that a crime is a product of human nature or is it possible to stop children from growing up to be criminals?

 

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Crimes make a serious effect upon human society. The reasons for committing a crime are varied and complex, so we could not say that violation of law is just human nature and that people’s tendency to break the law could be stopped when they are young.

 

We are still not sure what causes people to commit a crime. The reason seems to be clear in cases in that a thief steals money to make a living or to buy things normally unaffordable. Many thieves, when caught and interviewed, reveal that they come from poor families and have very little education. Therefore we could establish a relation between less privileged family background and low level of education. Many people used to believe that parents could teach their children the harms of wrongdoing by showing them the consequences of such action and the obligation of complying with social norms. Such method works for most children who are aware of what they are doing and what would happen from their action. But we also learn from news or other sources that many high-level officials take bribes or abuse power for their own profit. Such people with high income and good education clearly know what they are doing and the possible consequences. Such crimes would not have happened if tendency to commit crimes could be stopped when people were young.

 

Moreover, we know that people tend to act for their own benefit, but we do not know if this is due to human nature or other causes such as ideas learned later in life. If it is human nature, people live in faraway places without much education would commit crimes at a higher rate than people with schooling in cities. But by contrast, people in remote places are more honest and kind, and the crime rate is significantly lower than that in city / cities. From such evidence, we could not conclude that the above assertion is true.

 

While we continue to explore what causes crime and how to prevent it, we need to bear in mind that it is far more complex than we normally think. Accordingly, measures for crime prevention should also be multidimensional.

                     

To sum up, the conclusion that it is human nature to commit crimes and that people’s tendency to break the law could be stopped when they are young is not well supported. People become criminals for many reasons and we should adopt more effective methods for crime prevention. (401 words)

 

 

 

 

 

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